victim Tiffany Eunick, has publicly stated he would like to see Tate

Carla is in the seventh grade. She saw an unusudl news event and has written a report
for her English teacher. As part of a peer editing assignment, she would like you to
read it. After reading Carla's paper, think about the suggestions you would make to
help her correct and improve it. Then answer the multiple-choice questions that
follow.
Crime: An Adult Game?
(1) "How do you tell a child he's going to prison for the rest of his life
for playing a game?" a mother asked.
(2) Tears rolled down the cheek of fourteen-year-oid Lionel Tate as he
was sentenced to life in prison without parole. (3) He was convicted and
sentenced for the 1999 killing of a six-year-old female playrnate, Tiffany
Eunick. (4)Tate, who was merely twelve at the time and 180 pounds,
inflicted brutai injuries on the much smaller girl. (5) Her body displayed 35
wounds, including a fractured skull, alacercted liver, a broken rib internal
injuries, and numerous cuts and bruises. (6) Tates defense never denied the
fact that he caused Tiffany's death, but argues the death was an accident.
(7) Lionel was obsessed with the World Wrestling Federation and was
attempting to imitate moves executed by "The Rock," a major wrestling
superstar.
(8) After the judge read the verdict. (9) He was put in shackies, was
led off to jail. (10) His mother seemed in shock; his friends and relatives
wept. (11) Tate's mother, Kathleen Gossett-Tate, indicated her son were
unaware that he was facing life in prison.
(12) The evidence is obvious, and indisputable," said Judge Joel
Lazarus in the Fort Lauderdale, Florida courtroom. (13) "That evidence
supports the jury's verdict."
14) The Tate case has brought to the forefront of America's
consciousness; whether or not minors should be charged as adults in violent
crimes. (15) Many people argue a teenager may not have the mental
development to know the implications of their actions. (16) They cannot
understand the ramifications of their alleged crimes nor the true nature of a
prison sentence. (17) A first degree murder conviction carried different
penalties within different states. (18) Some states assert that while
recognizing the severity of the offense, it must be tempered with the mental
capacity of the juvenile offenders. (19) Still, Mark James the father of the
victim Tiffany Eunick, has publicly stated he would like to see Tate
imprisoned for life. (20) "I think he very much wanted to kill her. (21) It
was no accident."
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(z2)Whether America's sympathy stops with victim Tiffany Eunick
or extends to her killer, Lionel Tate, it is a situation where no one wins.
(23) "I am troubled by this" Governor Jeb Bush admitted. (24) "This case
isn't an easy thing; this is a tragic case."
1. What change, if any, should be made in sentence
A change internal to internul
B add a comma after rib
5?
C change lacerated to laserated
D make no change
2. What is the BEST way to combine sentences
8 and 9?
A After the judge read the verdict, Lionel was put in shackles,
leading off to jail.
B After the judge reads the verdict, he will be put in shackles
and led off to jail.
C After the judge read the verdict, Lionel was put in shackle s
and led off to jaii.
D After the judge read the verdict. He was put in shackles,
led off to jail.
3. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 19?
A change father to Father
B
C
D
4.
change victim to victum
add a comma after Mark James
make no change
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 15?
A change development to developement
B change implications to implacations
C change their to there
D make no change
5. What change, if any, shouid
A change Tiffiny's
be made in sentence 6?
to Tiffanys
B change Tates to Tate's
C change denied to denyed
D make no chanse
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6. What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?
A changefemale to Female
B
C
D
change six-year-old to six years old
add a comma after killing
make no chanse
7. What change, if
A
B
C
D
any, should be made in sentence 17?
change penalties to penalfy's
change carried to carries
change murder conviction to Murder Conviction
make no chanse
8. What is the BEST wav to rewrite the ideas presented in
sentence 14?
A The Tate case has brung to the forefront of America's
consciousness whether or not minors should be chareed
as adults.
B The Tate case has brought to the forefront of America's
consciousness. Whether or not minors should be charged
as adults in violent crime.
C The Tate case has brought to the forefront of America's
consciousness the question of whether teens should be charged
as adults in violent crime.
D No revision necessary.
9. What change, if
A
B
C
D
any, should be made in sentence 22?
change sympathy to sympathies
change Eunick to eunick
change no one to noone
make no change
lO.What change, if any, should be made in sentence 11?
A change were to was
B remove the comma after mother
C change unsware to unawares
D make no change
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