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american cv (mtic)
AMERICAN CV (MTIC)
PLUS SIMPLE, COMMERCIAL, VENDEUR
1) Ecrire d’abord le prénom en minuscules, et ensuite le nom de famille.
N'écrivez pas votre nom de famille en lettres majuscules. Cette pratique
semble bizarre aux anglophones. Ne jamais oublier d'ajouter les indicatifs du
pays pour le numéro de téléphone (0033 pour la France). Aux Etats-Unis,
contrairement au Royaume Uni, cette rubrique est réduite à sa plus simple
expression puisqu'il est interdit de recruter une personne sur des critères de
sexe, d'âge, de nationalité ou de situation familiale en vertu du principe
d'equal opportunity. Ne mettez donc pas de photo sur votre CV américain.
Laurence Martin (1)
24 rue des Fossés, Appartement 26
SAINT GERMAIN EN LAYE, 78100 – FR
Tel: (00 33) 1234567890
[email protected]
PROFILE (2):
Work status: student visa
Important : pour les formalités liées au permis de travail, il importe de
préciser sous l’état civil, le statut dont vous relever dans le cadre de votre
stage : visa étudiant.
A MIS student looking for a 6-month challenging internship from April 20XX to September 20XX as E-Business Marketing Assistant that requires a good
knowledge of the IT industry and intensive use of creative skills. Reliable, trustworthy, numerate and meticulous. Worked for an interactive communication
agency and a web-design office and gained a good understanding of what is required of an E-business Marketing Assistant. Able to work on own initiative or
as part of a team and can deal with administrative duties competently.
EDUCATION (3):
ISC, Paris School of Management, member of the French top business school association, Paris
Master en Management des Technologies de l’Information, Systems Administration and Technologies MA (4)
Exam to be taken in June 2008
20XX – 20XX
Subjects studied (6): Business Intelligence (BO expert level), Process Reengineering, Adobe Workflow Server, Business Plan Project Management, Web
Marketing, Cyber Marketing, Web referencing and positioning, Web 2.0, Customer Relationship Management (CRM), Affiliation, Online Customer Advocacy.
Methods: Gantt, PERT, Merise (MCD, MOT), Project Management, RAD, V cycle
ISCG, Paris Higher Institute in Management and Sales, a leading institution in undergraduate studies, Paris, France
20XX-20XX
BTS Action Commerciale, Undergraduate degree in Sales and Marketing, part-time (two days in school, three days in a company, EFE Group).
Subjects studied (6): customer relationships management, advertising, marketing and English.
Lyçée HOCHE, leading grammar school, Versailles, France
Baccalauréat STT, High School graduation in business studies, passed with (5) honors.
20XX
WORK EXPERIENCE (3):
June XX –Aug. XX
Wrote (7) policy briefs and end-of-meeting reports. Determined detailed programming procedures and story boards for converting specific problems to a
logical sequence of operations. Created web-based content and functions. Wrote creative briefs. Administered both internal and external production
resources. Monitored marketing and technological developments. Benchmarked OS performance.
WEB ART (8), school association specialized in website design and creation, Paris, France
President
A volunteer work, part of the school curriculum
20XX-20XX
3) Pour les rubriques Education et Work experience privilégiez l'ordre
chronologique inversé (c'est-à-dire le diplôme et l’expérience les
plus récents en premier).
Important : comme sur le CV français, il s’agit de distinguer les
expériences (WORK EXPERIENCE) des stages de formation
(INTERNSHIPS). Toutefois, si toutes vos expériences sont des stages,
contentez-vous d’indiquer WORK EXPERIENCE.
Important : à partir de 2 ans d’expérience cumulée, il faut indiquer Work
Expérience avant Education et mettre en avant son expérience
professionnelle relative au secteur ; faire disparaitre tout ce qui n’est
pas relatif au secteur.
Important : pour qu’un CV tienne sur une page, il faut, comme en français
( !) supprimer ce qui n’a pas de rapport avec le poste recherché, le secteur.
Au contraire, ceux qui n’ont pas assez d’expérience professionnelle relative
au secteur ou au métier indiquent les emplois qu’ils ont pu avoir : nanny for
young children, waiter/waitress, kitchen help, maid, nurse aide, chambermaid,
clerk, sales assistant, instructor in a holiday camp for children…
4) Pour les écoles, les acronymes doivent être explicités. Ainsi, ISC sera suivi
de Paris school of management.
5) Indiquez seulement les mentions TB (with high honors) ou B (with honors).
Controlled budget ($ 37,000). Determined business objectives (turnover projections). Organized and planned activities for each department. Made
appointments with customers.
EFE GROUP, Leading actor in the online and in-service training of employees and local communities, Paris, France
Sales and technical assistant
Internship, part time basis (2 days in school, 3 days in company)
20XX-20XX
Developed multimedia solutions for e-learning use and applications. Advised customers in the creation of Rich Media contents. Put multimedia contents
online. Tested OS technical developments.
MANPOWER, temp agency, Boulogne, France
Office Assistant
Summer Job
sont également ceux recherchés (cf. l’ANNONCE !). Indiquez une expérience
qui appuie vos dires et terminer sur des compétences clefs en rapport avec
l’ANNONCE. Attention toutefois à ne pas recopier l’annonce !
C’EST CE QUE QUE RECRUTEUR VA LIRE EN PREMIER, EN 30
SECONDES. VENDEZ-VOUS !
Important : 3ème année et MBA, vous avez déterminé votre choix de
carrière ? Alors utilisez l’expression CAREER PLANNING au lieu de
OBJECTIVE.
IL FAUT GARDER LE MEME STYLE JUSQU’AU BOUT. Ici, nous
avons : ENTREPRISE – Activité de l’entreprise – Ville – Pays –
Période – Poste Occupé – nature du contrat
I specialized in (6) sales, marketing and English.
RAPP DIGITAL (former Tribal DDB), interactive communication agency, Paris, France
MS Project Assistant
Summer Job
2) Profile est un puissant outil marketing pour se vendre dans un CV
américain. Indiquez : ce que vous recherchez (an internship), le poste
(as E-Business Marketing Assistant), les compétences que vous
désirez pouvoir mettre en œuvre (that requires a good knowledge of
the IT industry / creative skills), le niveau de responsabilité désiré
(l'emploi de l'adjectif challenging montrera que vous désirez des
responsabilités). Puis, les traits de personnalité que VOUS avez et qui
June XX –Aug. XX
Placed temporary workers in client companies. Outsourced the recruitment process for VINCI, the leading motorways, bridges, tunnels, car parks and
airports project designer and constructor (40 temps a week on average). Administered contracts. Controlled work (hours).
LANGUAGES (9):
French : native speaker
English : fluent (several stays in the USA)
Spanish : basic notions
TECHNICAL SKILLS (10):
Excel / Word / PowerPoint / Access / MS Project. Php, html, SQL, Dreamweaver, Photoshop
Experienced in administering the Avaya Infinity telephone system
Expert in most Networking systems
Software Applications: Lawson, MAPICS, Open4, Jet Forms, custom applications
Spread Sheets: MS Excel, LOTUS 123
ADDITIONAL INFORMATION:
Driving licence: Full, clean
INTERESTS (11):
Football: I played in a club for 5 years, from 20XX to 20XX
REFEREES (12):
Mr. JOHNDO, Rapp Digital & Rapp Collins, CEO, 55, rue d'Amsterdam 75391 Paris cedex 08 - F, [email protected], +33 1 23 45 67 89
Mr. SOANDSO, ISC, Paris School of Management, MIS Head of Department, 22 boulevard du Fort de Vaux 75848 Paris cedex 17 – F,
[email protected], +33 1 40 53 99 99
6) Précisez les matières clefs : arts and languages (L), maths (S), sciences (D),
economics, languages, maths, history and geography (ES), office practice,
accountancy, business and marketing (STT), medical studies (SMS).
Commencez toujours par indiquer en français le titre du diplôme puis
son équivalence en anglais. Exemples : BTS MUC (Undergraduate degree
in Sales and Marketing). DESS de marketing (Postgraduate specialization in
Marketing). Les autres diplômes sont : DUT (undergraduate degree in +
spécialisation), DEA (predoctoral research in + spécialisation et deux lignes
sur le mémoire de recherches si en rapport avec le secteur ou le métier).
Important : le terme «Grande Ecole» ne se traduit pas par «High
School» mais par «Top school». Ecole Préparatoire aux Grandes
Ecoles : A two-year preparatory course to prepare admittance
competition examination in the Top Business Schools.
7) Il faut être précis, concis, et mettre en avant ses réalisations (achievements)
en utilisant des verbes d'action au prétérit, sans le sujet I : coordinated,
organized, increased, launched.
Les 50 verbes d’action que les recruteurs recherchent :
1. accomplish
2. achieve
3. adapt
4. analyze
5. attain
6. balance
7. calculate
8. collaborate
9. communicate
10. complete
11. conduct
12. contribute
13. coordinate
14. create
15. delegate
16. design
17. develop
18. direct
19. enhance
20. evaluate
21. generate
22. implement
23. improve
24. increase
25. initiate
26. integrate
27. interview
28. invent
29. investigate
30. lead
31. make
32. market
33. monitor
34. motivate
35. negotiate
36. obtain
37. organize
38. plan
39. prepare
40. present
41. propose
42. research
43. sell
44. start
45. supervise
46. support
47. train
48. travel
49. work
50. write
Il ne faut pas hésiter à présenter des chiffres, surtout dans le CV
américain : taille des budgets gérés, augmentation (increase) du chiffre
d'affaires (turnover) de x %, etc.
8) Les activités associatives sont pour les recruteurs US un bon indicateur de
qualités personnelles telles que le leadership, le dévouement, ou encore la
ténacité. Il est généralement très apprécié de s'impliquer dans des actions
caritatives, d’aide ou d’entre aide qui montre un grand sens du service et
du dévouement.
Important : si l’association a une vocation humanitaire, alors créer une
rubrique : COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT plutôt que de la placer sous WORK
EXPERIENCE.
9) Il ne faut surtout pas surévaluer son niveau de langue : les niveaux
décroissants sont : Bilingue : bilingual English/French, Courant : fluent, Très
bon niveau : fairly fluent, Bon niveau : good working knowledge, Opérationnel
: working knowledge, Niveau moyen, scolaire : conversational, basic notions.
Débutant : beginner. A côté de votre niveau de langue, entre parenthèses,
vous pouvez préciser, le cas échéant, la nature et la durée du séjour effectué
à l’étranger). Le TOEIC est un must dans un CV Américain lorsqu’il est
supérieur à 750 pts.
10) IT SKILLS : cette rubrique, si elle est étoffée, et particulièrement en MTIC,
devrait apparaître immédiatement après votre formation, AVANT votre
expérience professionnelle. Les logiciels importants doivent être en gras.
NOTEZ le classement opéré !
11) Expliquez l’activité en détail. Ne vous contentez pas de la citer. Ajouter une
indication de performance (grades, niveaux) et de durée (nombre
d’années de pratique).
12) Au moins 2 références à choisir, bien sûr, parmi celles qui peuvent parler
de vous en tant que professionnel d’un point de vue commercial et technique
principalement Les jeunes diplômés ont intérêt à ajouter l’un de leurs
enseignants.
David Moriez, all rights reserved, © 2012
THE AUSTRALIAN RESUME
The Australian CV, more commonly called a resume, should be typed on no more than two
pages in reverse chronological order (= beginning with the most recent job).
There should be a one-page "cover letter" explaining why you applied for the job, and why
you would be a good choice for your prospective employers (this is known as "addressing the
selection criteria").
There should be no more than 2 pages of brief employment history. Short, snappy. Dates,
brief position description and couple of lines detailing job responsibilities.
Be sure to include and emphasize experiences particularly relevant to prospective
position ONLY (e.g. supervised <Number> people, handled <x> dollar sized accounts, etc).
It's neither the story of your life nore a big promo for your personal abilities via your extracurricular activities (unless they seem especially relevant).
You might get a chance to work such stuff into your interview, but don't make the CV culler
wade through a lot of stuff...
To conclude, an Australian CV is relevant to prospective position and very short (see the
example) and to help you with the vocabulary please use Le CV BRITANNIQUE and Le CV
AMERICAIN.
Arthur SMITH
567 current address
Melbourne, 3000
Contact: 03 9999 9999
Email: [email protected]
(Horizontal lines help define different sections)
OBJECTIVE
To obtain a position in public relations using my communication and promotional skills
EDUCATION
ISC, Paris School of Management (Paris)
Bachelor of Arts, International Business & Management, expected 2009
Related Courses
Public Relations, Marketing, International Trade, The Language of Advertising, Writing for Mass Media, Writing for
Business…
EXPERIENCE
(Most recent job first)
Program Coordinator
Campus Activities Council, RMIT University
Sept. 20XX - June 20XX
(Use bullet points to emphasize accomplishments)
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Initiated and organized the Campus Run for Charity
Promoted event with fliers, e- mail, newspaper ads, and campus radio station announcements
1,000 students participated (Good to show your achievement)
Campus Tour Guide
Office of Recruiting, RMIT University
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Led weekly tours for prospective students and parents
Wrote information sheet explaining campus- housing policy
Answered questions and addressed concerns
Selected to train new guides
Administrative Assistant
CBLA Business, National Bank, CBA
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Used Microsoft Word and Excel to type and edit reports
Drafted correspondence
Complimented for accuracy and attention to detail
SKILLS
•
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Sept. 20XX - June 20XX
Fluent in Chinese (Mandarine)
Fluent in Italian
Computer Skills (Words, Access, Excel)
REFERENCES
Available on request
Sept. 20XX - June 20XX
BRITISH CV (FINANCE)
Laurence Martin (1)
24, rue des Fossés, Appartement 26
SAINT GERMAIN EN LAYE, 78100 – FR
Tel: (00 33) 1234567890
[email protected]
PLUS RIGOUREUX, PLUS NEUTRE, MOINS COMMERCIAL
1)
D’abord le prénom en minuscules et le nom de famille. N'écrivez pas votre
nom de famille en lettres majuscules (cette pratique semble bizarre aux
anglophones). Ne jamais oublier d'ajouter les indicatifs du pays pour le
numéro de téléphone (0033 pour la France). Au Royaume Uni,
contrairement aux Etats-Unis, cette rubrique est proche de la rubrique « état
civil » française, très complète. Vous pouvez mettre une photo sur un CV
Britannique.
2)
Objective est une rubrique optionnelle mais efficace. Indiquez ici
simplement ce que vous recherchez (a work placement), le poste (as
accountant / financial analyst), les compétences que vous désirez pouvoir
mettre en œuvre (that requires a good knowledge of the IT industry /
negotiation skills), le niveau de responsabilité désiré (l'emploi de l'adjectif
challenging montrera que vous désirez des responsabilités). Important : 3ème
année et MBA, vous avez déterminé votre choix de carrière ? Alors utilisez
l’expression PROFESSIONAL OBJECTIVE au lieu de OBJECTIVE.
DOB: 9 June XXXX (00 years old)
Sex : Female
Nationality : French
Marital Status : single
OBJECTIVE (2):
A Finance student looking for a 6-month (2a) challenging work placement from April 20XX to September 20XX as Trainee Financial Analyst that requires a
good knowledge of the IT industry and intensive use of negotiation skills.
EDUCATION (3):
20XX – to present
3)
Subjects studied: Business Studies, Computer Studies, Calculus...
20XX-20XX
2a) Les adjectifs ne prennent pas le « S » du pluriel en anglais ! (n’oubliez
pas le « tiret »)
Master en Finances, Master Degree in Finance at the ISC, Paris School of Management, Paris, France (5).
Currently attending the first/ second/final year of a 3-year Master degree. Exam to be taken in June 20XX.
BTS Comptabilité et Gestion, Undergraduate degree in Accounting at the ISCG, Paris Higher Institute in Accounting,
Management and Sales, Paris, France.
Ici, nous avons : Année – (Durée) – ENTREPRISE – Activité de l’entreprise –
ville – pays Fonction occupée.
Subjects studied (6): office practice, accounting and finance.
20XX
Baccalauréat S (2.1) (6), A levels in mathematics and sciences, at HOCHE,
Pour la date, vous pouvez choisir : 19XX-20XX ou Jun.-Sep. XX (s’il s’agit de
la même année) ou Jun. XX-Sep. XX (s’il s’agit de plusieurs années)
6th
Form College, Versailles, France.
La phrase « Currently attending the first/second/final year of a 3-year Master
Degree » n’est utile que pour indiquer votre situation dans un parcours en 3
ans à l’ISC.
I specialized in (7) mathematics, chemistry and physics.
4)
EMPLOYMENT (3):
June XX –Aug. XX
AUBURN, Street Bank, Vancouver, USA
Portfolio Accountant
Summer Job. Responsibilities and achievements:
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Jul. – Aug. 20XX
Determined (7) cash available for daily security investment on $4.0 billion portfolio
Ensured timely settlement on all fixed income and equity trades
Calculated and posted amortization of all long-term fixed income holdings
Computed net asset value of funds on a monthly basis
Calculated interest accruals on fixed income securities
Answered (8) the phone
Wrote letters
Dealt with clients’ enquiries and complaints
WORK PLACEMENTS (4):
20XX
(3 months)
Au contraire, ceux qui n’ont pas assez d’expérience professionnelle relative
au secteur ou au métier peuvent indiquer les emplois qu’ils ont eu : nanny for
young children, waiter/waitress, kitchen help, maid, nurse aide, chambermaid,
employee, sales assistant, instructor in a holiday camp for children…
5)
Pour les écoles, les acronymes doivent être explicités. Ainsi, ISC sera suivi
de Paris school of management.
6)
Contrairement au CV américain, sachez qu'en Grande-Bretagne lorsque
quelqu'un a un diplôme "with honours", cela signifie qu’il a étudié plus de
matières et passé plus d’examens pour obtenir le même diplôme. On
n’indique donc pas TB (with high honours) ou B (with honours) mais on
utilise: très Bien (First Class), bien (2.1), assez bien (2.2), sans mention
(Pass).
7)
Précisez la section : arts and languages (L), maths (S), sciences (D),
economics, languages, maths, history and geography (ES), office practice,
accountancy, business and marketing (STT), medical studies (SMS).
JOHNSON & STEVENS, Chartered Accountants, Manchester, United Kingdom
Administrative Assistant
Work placement. Responsibilities and achievements:
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Assisted (8) the Senior Partner who was conducting audits on major companies in the area
Organized and maintained the Senior Partner's filing system
Devised a new filing system to maintain the files held by the department.
Important : pour les diplômes, le CV Britannique doit tout mentionner et tout
détailler. Chaque diplôme doit être accompagné de la liste des principales
matières étudiées et des options choisies. La thèse, elle, mérite bien un petit
résumé de cinq lignes. Attention les intitulés de diplômes ne doivent pas être
traduits, il est plutôt conseillé de les compléter par leur équivalent en anglais.
OTHER ACTIVITIES (4) (9)
20XX -20XX
GLOBAL’ISC, ISC Paris School of Management association, Paris, France
Assistant
A volunteer work, part of the first-year curriculum. Responsibilities and achievements:
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Les équivalences Britanniques des diplômes : CAP (Youth Training, NVQ
level 1.2), BEP (BTEC First Diploma, NVQ level 1), BEPC (GCSE),
Baccalauréat (A-Levels), Brevet de Technicien Supérieur (BTEC National
Diploma, NVQ level 1). Les principales spécialisations de BTS : Action
Commerciale ou Management des Unités Commerciales (Management and
Marketing), Commerce International (International Trade), Comptabilité
Gestion (Accountancy), Forces de Vente (Sales and Marketing),
Communication des Entreprises (Advertising).DEUG ou DEUST (A two-year
Diploma of Higher Education), Licence (BA, BS/BSc), Maîtrise (MA), Diplôme
d'Ingénieur (Master's Degree in Engineering), DEA / DESS (A one-year
Postgraduate degree), Master (Master's Degree, NVQ, level 5), MBA (MBA),
Doctorat (PhD).
Helped (8) students in finding internships abroad
Provided (8) English CV and Cover Letter writing services with the help of external consultants
LANGUAGES (10):
French : native speaker
English : TOEIC 891 points (6 months in London in 20XX and 4 months in Vancouver in 20XX as a volunteer for AIDS International)
Spanish : some notions
Attention,le terme «Grande Ecole» ne se traduit pas par «High School» mais
par «Top school». Ecole Préparatoire aux Grandes Ecoles : A two-year
preparatory course for entry examination in the Top Business Schools.
ADDITIONAL INFORMATION:
IBM Compatible PCs running Microsoft Windows, MS-DOS, WordPerfect, Word for Windows, Lotus 1-2-3 and Microsoft Visual C
Clean driving licence
8)
PERSONAL INTERESTS (11):
Gambling on the Stock Exchange:
Football:
Travels:
Vous distinguez les expériences, des stages formateurs. Cependant, vous
pouvez parfaitement changer le titre EMPLOYEMENT par ‘relevant
experience’ si votre expérience est en rapport directe avec le poste demandé.
Vous pouvez ainsi, avoir 2 rubriques : RELEVANT EXPERIENCE et OTHER
EMPLOYEMENT.
Important : à partir de 2 ans d’expérience cumulée, il faut indiquer Work
Experience avant Education et mettre en avant votre expérience
professionnelle relative au secteur. En conséquence, pour qu’un CV
tienne sur une page, il faut, comme en français ( !) supprimer ce qui n’a pas
de rapport avec le poste recherché, le secteur. Il est également possible de
regrouper toutes ses expériences d’emplois saisonniers, s’ils font tous
appel aux mêmes compétences. Exemple : Summer 2004: A variety of
customer service roles including bar work, waitressing and telesales.
Developed an awareness of customer relationship management and
improved my influencing skills when working with challenging clients under
pressure.
BNP PARIBAS, Bank, Paris, France.
Secretary
Summer job. Responsibilities and achievements:
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Pour les rubriques Education et Employment privilégiez l'ordre
chronologique inversé (c'est-à-dire le diplôme et l’expérience les plus
récents en premier) et DE GARDER LE MEME STYLE JUSQU’AU BOUT.
Il faut être précis, concis, et mettre en avant ses réalisations (achievements)
en utilisant des verbes d'action au prétérit, sans le sujet « I » : coordinated,
organized, increased, launched.
I have gambled on the SE in a club for the last 4 years
Les 50 verbes d’action les plus recherchés
1. accomplish
2. achieve
3. adapt
4. analyze
5. attain
6. balance
7. calculate
8. collaborate
9. communicate
10. complete
I played in a club for 5 years, from 20XX to 20XX
Many think that I travelled a lot. I would say that the world is so big, while being such a small place that one
has to take the time to go around this paradox. I visited England, Germany, Italy, China, South Korea, Hong
Kong, Poland, Spain. And I lived in the USA (Vancouver) and in Great Britain (Manchester).
REFEREES (12):
Mr Francis DUBERQUE, Head of the Lending Department, BNP PARIBAS, 114 Boulevard de Grenelle, 75015 Paris - F, [email protected], +33 12
34 56 78 90
21. generate
22. implement
23. improve
24. increase
25. initiate
26. integrate
27. interview
28. invent
29. investigate
30. lead
31. make
32. market
33. monitor
34. motivate
35. negotiate
36. obtain
37. organize
38. plan
39. prepare
40. present
41. propose
42. research
43. sell
44. start
45. supervise
46. support
47. train
48. travel
49. work
50. write
9)
Les activités associatives sont pour les recruteurs Anglo-Saxons un bon
indicateur de qualités telles que le leadership, le dévouement, ou encore la
ténacité. Il est généralement très apprécié de s'impliquer dans des actions
caritatives, d’aide ou d’entre aide qui montre un grand sens du service et
du dévouement.
10)
Ne pas surévaluer son niveau de langue : Bilingue : bilingual English/French,
Courant : fluent, Très bon niveau : fairly fluent, Bon niveau : good working
knowledge, Opérationnel : working knowledge, Niveau moyen :
conversational, Niveau faible : basic notions. Débutant : beginner. A côté de
votre niveau de langue, entre parenthèses, vous pouvez préciser, le cas
échéant, la nature et la durée du séjour effectué à l’étranger. Le TOEIC n’est
pas ce qui est le plus recherché dans un CV Britannique (le TOEFL est
préféré) MAIS si votre TOEIC est égal ou supérieur à 780 pts, il faut
l’indiquer.
Expliquez l’activité dans le détail. Ne vous contentez pas de la citer.
Ajouter une indication de performance (échelons, grades, niveaux) et de
durée (nombre d’années de pratique). Assurez-vous d’impliquer le
recruteur par une vision humaine de l’activité – racontez une histoire.
Mr X, Professor and Head of Department, ISC, Paris School of Management, 22 bd du Fort de Vaux, 75848 Paris Cedex 17 - F,
[email protected], +33 12 34 56 78 90
11)
12)
David Moriez, all rights reserved, © 2012
11. conduct
12. contribute
13. coordinate
14. create
15. delegate
16. design
17. develop
18. direct
19. enhance
20. evaluate
2 références : votre ancien supérieur hiérarchique (ou votre ancien directeur
de stage) et l’un de vos professeurs si vous êtes jeune diplômé ou en cours
de formation supérieure.
Prof. David MORIEZ, Responsable du Département Développement Personnel et Professionnel
All rights reserved
20XX (3)
a 16-week (4 months) work placement in your company.
3
4-month work placement
David Moriez, Responsable Développement Personnel et Professionnel, all rights reserved
Comment rédiger une lettre de motivation en
réponse à une annonce en anglais ?
David Moriez, Responsable Développement Personnel et Professionnel, all rights reserved
La forme
Une lettre dactylographiée :
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La lettre de motivation doit être dactylographiée, à moins qu'une lettre manuscrite
ne soit expressément demandée dans l'annonce. En effet, les entreprises anglosaxonnes n'ont que très rarement recours à la graphologie et préfèrent gagner en
efficacité avec une lettre facile à lire.
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Elle ne doit pas dépasser une page. Il est préférable de rester neutre : papier
blanc et police de caractères standards (arial est parfait !).
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Il faut respecter des marges suffisantes, en gardant à l'esprit que les feuilles
américaines sont légèrement plus courtes que les feuilles A4 : une partie de votre
lettre pourrait se retrouver coupée en cas de photocopie.
L'adresse, la date et la référence :
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Votre adresse devra être placée en haut, alignée à droite et mentionner votre
numéro de téléphone et votre adresse e-mail (pour le téléphone, ne pas oublier
l'indicatif de la France : 33).
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En-dessous, vous écrirez la date selon le format suivant : 4th September 20XX
(Britannique) / September 4 20XX (Américain). Attention, ne mentionnez pas la ville.
Cette pratique, courante en français, n'a pas lieu d'être en anglais. Elle intriguerait
votre lecteur.
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L'adresse du destinataire est alignée à gauche.
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Il faut ensuite indiquer l’objet : " Reference : your advertisement in The Times
Magazine, number 1234, published on January 4th 20 XX... "
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Les formules de politesse :
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Commencer la lettre par Dear Mr X, Dear Mrs X, Dear Ms X (Ms est le terme
d'adresse neutre à employer lorsqu'on ne sait pas si son interlocutrice est mariée ou
non). Si vous ne connaissez pas le nom de la personne à qui vous vous adressez,
utilisez Dear Sir.
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A la fin de la lettre, la formule de politesse est beaucoup plus simple qu'en
français : Sincerely Yours. Mais attention : on utilise Yours faithfully si on n'a pas
mentionné le nom précis du destinataire de la lettre.
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Immédiatement sous la signature, il est d'usage de dactylographier ses nom et
prénom.
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En bas à gauche de la lettre, on rappelle que le CV est joint : Encl. : personal CV
(Britannique) ou Encl. : personal resume (Américain).
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Le contenu
Le premier paragraphe :
Le premier paragraphe de la lettre de motivation a pour but de répondre aux deux questions
suivantes : pourquoi écrivez-vous ? qui êtes-vous ? Vous pourrez utiliser des formulations
telles que :
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Your advertisement in The New York Times has caught my attention.
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I am writing in response to your advertisement in The New York Times.
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I have read in The New York Times about your decision to open a branch in Paris. I
believe I can contribute to the implementation of your new strategy.
Les deuxième et troisième paragraphes :
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Le deuxième paragraphe doit permettre à votre employeur potentiel de comprendre
en quoi votre profil et votre expérience conviennent parfaitement au poste à
pourvoir. Il est bien entendu nécessaire d'adapter ce paragraphe à l'entreprise que
vous contactez.
Vous pourrez utiliser des formulations telles que :
As requested in your advertisement, I have a good knowledge of programming in
C++.
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Un troisième paragraphe peut vous permettre de mettre en valeur vos soft skills (ce
qu'on n'apprend pas à l'école) qui seront utiles à l'entreprise :
During my internship, I learnt to interact with high level decision makers.
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La fin de la lettre :
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Pour terminer la lettre, il est bon de réitérer votre motivation pour le poste et pour
l'entreprise. Il n'est pas choquant de répéter à cet endroit votre numéro de
téléphone :
You may contact me by phone at 06 23 45 ...
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Vous devez également provoquer une rencontre :
I look forward to discussing these issues with you in person.
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Il sera assez bien vu, surtout aux Etats-Unis, que vous preniez l'initiative de la
rencontre :
I will be calling you in about a week to give you more details about myself.
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Quelques erreurs à éviter
Ne pas mélanger l'anglais britannique et américain :
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Ne mélangez pas anglais britannique et américain, n'écrivez pas dans un style
familier, n'utilisez pas de contractions ou d'abréviations. Par exemple, pour
mentionner l'annonce à laquelle vous répondez, utilisez le mot advertisement et non
pas son abréviation ad.
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Pour une candidature aux Etats-Unis, ce serait une erreur de croire que l'anglais
américain permet d'utiliser une langue relâchée et familière. Dans le cadre de
relations professionnelles et commerciales, l'anglais soutenu est de rigueur.
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C'est d'ailleurs pour vous une bonne occasion de faire la preuve de votre capacité
à rédiger des notes, mémos, rapports, courriers aux clients. Vous n'oublierez
d'ailleurs pas de faire relire votre lettre par un anglophone.
Ne pas envoyer de lettre type :
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Il ne faut pas non plus tomber dans le piège de la lettre de motivation type envoyée
en réponse à toutes les annonces après simple modification du nom du destinataire.
Ceci est généralement assez vite perçu par votre lecteur. De plus, une telle lettre n'a
que peu de chances de captiver le recruteur.
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Un autre piège serait d'envisager la lettre de motivation comme un document en
soi. Elle est en fait indissociable du CV et a pour but de donner envie au recruteur
de le lire avec attention. La stratégie consiste en fait à éveiller une curiosité qui ne
sera assouvie qu'à la lecture du CV.
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Eviter la prétention :
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Enfin, il faut bien faire la différence entre se vendre et être prétentieux. Un candidat
sachant mettre ses qualités en valeur et présenter la réalité à son avantage sera
apprécié, notamment parce que l'on pourra lui demander de faire la même chose
face aux clients. En revanche, la personne prétentieuse limite ses chances,
notamment parce qu'il est peu probable qu'elle soit disposée au travail en équipe.
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Sachez embellir la réalité et la tourner à votre avantage, mais ne mentez pas. Le
mensonge peut passer dans votre lettre, mais a toutes les chances d'être repéré lors
de l'entretien.
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Avant de commencer à rédiger votre lettre de candidature, vérifiez que vous avez
compris et retenu l’essentiel de ce module d’auto-formation avec ce quizz (n’oubliezpas de vérifier vos réponses !) :
1. Votre adresse doit être placée :
1.
en haut à droite de la feuille
2.
en haut à gauche de la feuille
3.
en haut au centre de la feuille
2. Si cela n’est pas précisé dans l’annonce, il est préférable d’envoyer :
1.
une lettre dactylographiée
2.
une lettre manuscrite
3.
ça n’a pas d’importance
3. Vous ne savez pas si Anna Smith, la Directrice des Ressources Humaines, est
mariée. Vous commencerez votre lettre par :
1.
Dear Mrs Smith,
2.
Dear Madam Smith,
3.
Dear Ms Smith,
4. Pour répondre à une offre d’emploi aux Etats-Unis, terminer sa lettre par la phrase « I
will be calling you in about a week to give you more details about myself » est
considéré :
1.
extrêmement positif
2.
naturel
3.
déplacé
5. Une des choses suivantes est à proscrire dans une lettre de motivation en anglais :
1.
dactylographier ses nom et prénom sous sa signature
2.
utiliser de l’anglais familier
3.
se présenter dans le premier paragraphe
6. Laquelle des trois formules de politesse suivantes n’utiliserez-vous pas à la fin de
votre lettre ?
1.
Yours faithfully,
2.
Sincerely Yours,
3.
Please agree to my sincere salutations,
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Dear Student,
You have applied for a student position at a University or Business School and the admission
Board is now asking you to attach an essay to you application form.
Do not worry – you are offered the greatest opportunity ever to tell them who you REALLY
are.
This essay is similar to the moment in an interview when you shake the interviewer’s hand and
smile.
You must know that whether you are asked to answer a specific essay question or you are left
free to write the subject of your choice, application essays are used by admissions officers to
decide between two (or even two hundred) candidates with almost identical profiles.
The application essay is often the only guide admission officers have of your ambition,
personality, and interests.
As a result, your essay must be unique, captivating, and informative.
An essay must stand out because of its solid writing (***NO SPELLING MISTAKE! ***) and
superior organization.
All in all, your essay must demonstrate a nice balance between your professional and your
personal achievements; the ideal combination being to show that personal achievement
translates into professional skills!
For example, your essay can show that you are dedicated not just to helping people, but to
academics, learning, and some other subjects, preferably those subjects you apply for in your
future University or Business School!
Ifyou have been a member of an Association at the ISC, Paris School of Management, or even
if you have tutored students this is not enough to make recruiting officers believe in your
sincerity but the thoughtfulness and detail with which you describe it will.
If you have put obvious time into developing an effective method of organizing or managing
people, then you must indicate it. Show that you are result-oriented by measuring your success
in terms of real numbers and percentage increases. Someone who applies such standards of
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accountability to his extracurricular life is sure to bring the same standards to school and
business!
In the end, you should always
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Briefly assess your career progress to date.
Elaborate on your future career plans.
Elaborate on your motivation for pursuing a graduate degree at the host
University/School.
DO NOT FORGET to underline your interests for the school’s particular program. Articulate
why the particular program makes sense for you given your unique professional and personal
goals. To do this well, you must spend the necessary time in introspection and also research the
school.
USE ONLY what can apply to yourself and DO NOT copy and paste passages from their
official website!
If you are unsure of what your goals are always admit so honestly rather than make up
something BUT give credible reasons for your indecision, and explain why you believe that this
school’s program will help you overcome your ambivalence.
Do not write what you think they want to hear; admissions officers can spot this kind of
insincerity from a mile away. Anglo-Saxon cultures appreciate trust, honesty and value
heterogeneous mix ofbackgrounds and experiences MORE than diplomas and certificates...
Therefore, trying to fashion yourself after your conception of a typical applicant can hurt you
even ifyou do it well.
So, remember, the admission essay samples you will find hereafter are just here to help you but
the truer you are to your real motivations and desires, the better your essay will be.
Good Luck!
Dr David C. Moriez
PhD, MBA, BA
Head of Career Planning Department
Council of Europe examination advising committee member
Society of Human Resource Management (SHRM) professional member
Professor of International Management, Marketing and Trade
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Methodology
The personal statement generally falls into one of two categories:
1. The general, comprehensive personal statement:
This allows you maximum freedom in terms of what you write and is the type of statement
often prepared for standard medical or law school application forms.
2.
The response to very specific questions:
Often, business and graduate school applications ask specific questions, and your statement
should respond specifically to the question being asked. Some business school applications
favor multiple essays, typically asking for responses to three or more questions.
Questions to ask yourself before you write:
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What's special, unique, distinctive, and/or impressive about you or your life story?
What details of your life (personal or family problems, history, people or events that
have shaped you or influenced your goals) might help the committee better
understand you or help set you apart from other applicants?
When did you become interested in this field and what have you learned about it
(and about yourself) that has further stimulated your interest and reinforced your
conviction that you are well suited to this field? What insights have you gained?
How have you learned about this field—through classes, readings, seminars, work or
other experiences, or conversations with people already in the field?
If you have worked a lot during your college years, what have you learned (leadership
or managerial skills, for example), and how has that work contributed to your
growth?
What are your career goals?
Are there any gaps or discrepancies in your academic record that you should explain
(great grades but mediocre LSAT or GRE scores, for example, or a distinct upward
pattern to your GPA if it was only average in the beginning)?
Have you had to overcome any unusual obstacles or hardships (for example,
economic, familial, or physical) in your life?
What personal characteristics (for example. integrity. compassion. persistence) do
you possess that would improve your prospects for success in the field or profession?
Is there a way to demonstrate or document that you have these characteristics?
What skills (for example, leadership, communicative, analytical) do you possess?
Why might you be a stronger candidate for graduate school—and more successful
and effective in the profession or field than other applicants?
What are the most compelling reasons you can give for the admissions committee to
be interested in you?
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General advice
Answer the questions that are asked
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If you are applying to several schools, you may find questions in each application that
are somewhat similar.
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Don't be tempted to use the same statement for all applications. It is important to
answer each question being asked, and if slightly different answers are needed, you
should write separate statements. In every case, be sure your answer fits the
question being asked.
Tell a story
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Think in terms of showing or demonstrating through concrete experience. One of the
worst things you can do is to bore the admissions committee. If your statement is
fresh, lively, and different, you'll be putting yourself ahead of the pack. If you
distinguish yourself through your story, you will make yourself memorable.
Be specific
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Don't, for example, state that you would make an excellent doctor unless you can
back it up with specific reasons. Your desire to become a lawyer, engineer, or
whatever should be logical, the result of specific experience that is described in your
statement. Your application should emerge as the logical conclusion to your story.
Find an angle
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If you're like most people, your life story lacks drama, so figuring out a way to make it
interesting becomes the big challenge. Finding an angle or a "hook" is vital.
Concentrate on your opening paragraph
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The lead or opening paragraph is generally the most important. It is here that you
grab the reader's attention or lose it. This paragraph becomes the framework for the
rest of the statement.
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Tell what you know
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The middle section of your essay might detail your interest and experience in your
particular field, as well as some of your knowledge of the field. Too many people
graduate with little or no knowledge of the nuts and bolts of the profession or field
they hope to enter. Be as specific as you can in relating what you know about the
field and use professional language. Refer to experiences (work, research, etc.),
classes, conversations with people in the field, books you've read, seminars you've
attended, or any other source of specific information about the career you want
and why you're suited to it. Since you will have to select what you include in your
statement, the choices you make are often an indication of your judgment.
Don't include some subjects
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There are certain things best left out of personal statements. For example, references
to experiences or accomplishments in high school (Lycée) or earlier are generally not
a good idea. Don't mention potentially controversial subjects (for example,
controversial religious or political issues).
Do some research, if needed
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If a school wants to know why you're applying to it rather than another school, do
some research to find out what sets your choice apart from other universities or
programs. If the school setting would provide an important geographical or cultural
change for you, this might be a factor to mention.
Write well and correctly
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Be meticulous. Type and proofread your essay very carefully. Many admissions
officers say that good written skills and command of correct use of language are
important to them as they read these statements. Express yourself clearly and
concisely. Adhere to stated word limits.
Avoid clichés
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A medical school applicant who writes that he is good at science and wants to help
other people is not exactly expressing an original thought. Stay away from oftenrepeated or tired statements.
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Sample Admission Essay 1
On the surface I think I am like most young and modern French boy/girl: I take school seriously, I
have dreams and goals for the future that I am determined to make happen, and I don’t expect
anyone to do the hard work for me. I come from what is an increasingly normal background: my
parents are divorced and I live with my mom and sisters and only occasionally see my dad since he
now lives on the other side of the country, but I still feel very lucky to have a supportive, if spread
out, family behind me. What makes me different from the rest of the crowd though is how I choose
to fill my time away from school. Though I come from a middle to high income background, I knew I’d
have to get a job in the summers and/or after school to help fund college, but instead of getting the
easiest job I could find like many of my friends, I purposely sought work that would teach me new
skills as well as give me a sense of fulfillment, which is why I turned to coaching soccer/ working as a
camp counselor... I know that every summer I am out there I’m helping the kids in my community,
not only by watching to make sure they are playing with skill and determination, but also by helping
them learn invaluable life lessons, like how to be a good teammate and friend, and how to settle
disputes fairly and efficiently. I also have now added the title of waitress to my resume and while at
first glance this job may not seem to offer me skills useful in pursuing a college degree, I have
found it to offer incomparable training in multi-tasking, responsibility, money-management,
perseverance and compassion for others.
My grades have always been high and I am especially proud of this because I don’t naturally excel in
all subjects. Writing has always been a challenge for me because I find grammar to often be
confusing, spelling too, but I have learned through my involvement with many varsity level sports
that quitting never feels as good as conquering your own fears, which is why I have sought not only
advanced placement writing classes to really help me focus on mastering the written word, but I
have also challenged myself to take advanced placement Greek which, while very difficult, has
helped me immensely with learning word origins, giving me the foundations to figure out challenging
words in English as well. I am now on the cusp of attending college and preparing for a career, and I
am confident that the determination I have displayed thus far will only grow stronger as my course
work becomes more demanding. At this point I think I want to focus on a career in the law because
the riddle of our legal system fascinates me and I really believe that, coming from a divorced
household myself, I could offer empathetic legal counsel to others facing the ordeal of family court. I
know that I am young and the career path I find myself on after earning an undergraduate degree
may be very different than what I envision now, but I plan to make my college education a well
rounded and broadening one that hopefully will allow me to explore both my academic and artistic
interests so that wherever the future takes me I will have a solid foundation upon which to build a
career.
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Sample Admission Essay 2
Sometimes a task can seem monumental when you try to visualize the entire thing, but if you break it
down into smaller goals suddenly it can become manageable. When I first started to consider going
to college so that I could make a better life for myself and my daughter, I thought it was going to be
almost impossible. I was working in a convenience store trying to make ends meet as a single
mother, but I just knew that there was something more out there for me. I had the drive to build a
career that did not involve running credit cards through the machine and cleaning the public
bathroom, I just needed the skills and the opportunity to determine what that other dream job was.
It can be difficult to leave what is familiar, and I actually really liked the people who owned the
convenience store and knew that they would be sad to see me go, but it was time to strike out on my
own. I set a goal of successfully finishing one semester at my local junior college, just to see if I could
manage it, and much to my delight I not only completed the semester, but earned a place on the
Dean’s List as well. I felt a tremendous amount of pride in this accomplishment, and it certainly
wasn’t easy, but it helped to give me the confidence I needed to set longer term goals. I found that I
was very interested in the sciences and how the human body works. I am now about to graduate
with my Associate’s of Science degree, having maintained my position on the Dean’s List the entire
time, and I finally know that I am setting the kind of example for my daughter that I always dreamed
of when I was wringing out the mop and restocking the shelves at the convenience store.
I am now eager to take my education to the next level by pursuing a degree in nursing at ____
University. It is my goal after graduating to become a nurse serving lower income and
underrepresented communities. I am a naturally compassionate person, and because of my lower
socio-economic background and life experience, I can relate easily to people who may fear going to
see medical professionals whom they perceive as different from them, but whose services they need.
I can help bridge that gap, and thereby encourage more people to actually get help that they require
in a comforting and non-threatening environment.
My commitment to my education is strong and I know that, if admitted, I will be able to earn a solid
grade point average, and graduate with the skills and experience I will need to build my career as a
nurse. I feel such relief and gratitude to know that I have found my calling, and I am eager to begin
this new stage of my education. Certainly the next two years will be challenging—requiring much
juggling of schedules and time management expertise--but I have done it before, and with my clear
goal in my mind, I know I can do it again with equal or greater success. Even though my commitment
to my education takes some time away from my child, I know that ultimately it will be worth the
sacrifice because she will see how important an education is by witnessing all I have given up to
achieve mine, and what a strong career I will be able to build because of those same sacrifices.
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Sample Admission Essay 3
My father always used to say to me: “ if you want people to respect you, first you must respect
yourself”. At this juncture in my life I see going back to school to earn a degree in nursing as a symbol
of respecting myself and the goals I have set for myself. I have made sacrifices in my life that are
common for many women: putting my wife’s career before my own, and my child’s life and growth
before my own as well, and for many years these sacrifices have been worthwhile, but I am proud to
say that my son is now 12 and not in need of his father in the same way he used to be, and my wife is
fortunately very supportive of my career goals.
Growing up as the only son of an Army physician in France was quite an experience. The military
lifestyle over there is much like it is in the United Kingdom with frequent moves and the constant of
always being the “new boy” in school. Because I was being uprooted every year or so I learned to
find solace in school work because this was an area I could excel in no matter where in France we
moved. I also found that I had a natural gift for the sciences and, perhaps due to my father’s
influence, dreamed of one day becoming a doctor. I began my medical training in France at the age
of 18 and after 3 years began working as a nurse to partially fund the rest of my studies. My first
experience working in a hospital was excellent, and because I was so young and inexperienced I
assumed that all aspects of medical care would offer this kind of fulfillment. I chose to specialize in
pharmacy and went on to earn all of my accreditations and degrees for this in France. I stayed for 2
more years in France after graduating, working as a pharmacist, which I found to be far less
rewarding than my time working as a nurse had been. I missed being able to learn about such a wide
variety of ailments, and offer care and compassion not just to my patients, but their families as well,
in their time of need. It just wasn’t the same in pharmacy, and because I lacked a passion for this
field, it was not too hard for me to move to the United States, even knowing that all of my medical
training would be useless here.
I have lived in France for ___ years now, met and married my wife, raised a family, and learned to call
it home, but I still miss the satisfaction and personal growth that I found while working as a nurse in
France. I know that I can find that same degree of fulfillment again, and I am eager to begin the
process at ____ University. My grades have always been high, but now that I know my true calling,
and have the luxury of time to pursue it, I have maintained a perfect grade point average while taking
prerequisite courses for my nursing degree at my local community college. I have every reason to
expect that my academic performance while pursuing a nursing degree at ___ University will be no
less impressive.
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Sample Admission Essay 4
Influence? Why is it that the people who influence us most influence us in ways that are not easily quantified?
Through her work with abused children, my mother has shown me the heroism of selfless dedication to a
worthy cause. By being an upstanding individual, my playwriting teacher in middle school acted as an inspiring
male role model at a time when I needed one most. By being approachable and interesting, my World History
teacher in my freshman year of high school opened my eyes to the connections between a society's culture and
its history and broadened my view of cultures and the world. While these influences mean much to me and
have contributed greatly to my development, they came too easily to mind.
The fact that I could sit down and write a list of how these people influenced me suggests that the influence did
not alter me in any profound way. These people are all my elders, and perhaps I feel distanced from them. The
person whose influence shook me to the deepest level is a person whose influence is nearly impossible to
describe. Mike, the best friend I’ve ever had, changed me, and I changed him at one of the most crucial times in
our lives: the seventh grade. We developed our personalities, our senses of humor, and our love for girls at the
same time and in the same manner. It would cheapen his influence to quantify it; I am what I am because of
him; I cannot say that about anybody else.
Mike came to my school in the seventh grade, and we immediately clicked. Before he came, I didn’t feel like an
outcast by any means, as I had my friends that I had known since first grade. However, until Mike, I never had
anyone my age to identify with completely. Mike made me feel confident in who I was; he reaffirmed my drives
and my thoughts and my inspirations. At this awkward stage in our lives, we found uncritical appreciation in
each other. We both were obsessed by movies and had a similar sense of humor. We had the same problems
and the same thoughts. That was all it took.
Halfway through that same year, Mike and I became inseparable. In fact, our yearbook had a section that lists
the names of students and what they were never seen without. Under Mike, it read: “Ted, ” and under Ted:
“Mike.” I became a staple at his house and he at mine. We no longer had to ask our parents if it was ok to have a
sleepover on weekends, they assumed we would. On weekdays, we usually walked over to his house, which was
near school, and hung out there till I had to go home. Our favorite past time on those long afternoons after school
was to walk to the nearby food mart and get a bag of chips and two 24 oz. Coca-Colas. Watching a movie, we
would sit on his couch with our chips and Coke and talk about our dreams of working together in the movies. Mike
wanted to be a director and actor, and I wanted to be an actor and a playwright/screenwriter. It was the perfect
combination. We even tried writing a few scripts together.
Of course, as two seventh grade boys, it wasn’t all skips through the park either. We were extremely
competitive and would get into brutal fights for seemingly no reason at all. One time, I pulled out a chunk of his
hair, but I don’t remember what started the fight. I think that our connection was so intense that we could not
have normal emotions toward each other. As friends, we were best friends, but in an argument, we wanted to
fight each other to the death. Still, the Wrestlemania days were rare; ordinarily, the intensity of that
connection was a good thing. I was pretty shy about girls, and when I did talk about them with guys, I would
usually just say a girl was "hot." With Mike, I could really talk about girls and who they were; with Mike, I didn’t
have to put on my public “cool” façade but could really say what I felt about a girl.
Then we went to separate high schools. We tried to maintain the friendship, and you might think we would
have been able to since we had been so close, but we drifted apart. Our friendship was based on being near
each constantly, of growing up in the same town, under the same conditions, with the same hopes, fears, and
dreams. Now we still go to movies occasionally and hang out, but it's not the same, and we both know it. I
thought Mike and I would be friends forever, and maybe we will be. I mean, we have to make those movies
together, right? But the way things look right now, I doubt we will ever reconnect. Our friendship in the
seventh grade was magical, and lightning doesn’t strike twice.
My playwriting teacher from middle school left, but I handled it. I learned a great deal from him, and I
appreciate him for the subject he taught and the way that he taught it. I will probably miss my parents when I
leave for college, but I doubt the separation will pain me deeply since the connection between parents and
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children will always be there. With Mike, I lost the best friend I ever had, and I lost that forever. Losing that
kind of bond cuts deep, and I know it's the type of wound that doesn't heal. It’s the type of wound you just live
with.
But just because we're not friends anymore, it doesn't slight the times we had when we were friends. Those
times are what influenced me so deeply. No, Mike did not work some lesson into my heart, he worked himself
into my heart, and even if I never see the guy again he changed me forever. I think that finding someone who
you truly connect with and feel that you were destined to meet, someone who you feel truly understands you
and makes you feel special, I think meeting someone like that is one of the most profound experiences you can
have.
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Sample Admission Essay 5
A little over two years ago I began tutoring high school students in several types of mathematics, including
preparation for the S.A.T. Test. While I did this initially to earn money, I have continued to tutor (often pro
bono) because I enjoy the material and the contact with the students.
I have always enjoyed math tremendously. I can remember riding in a car for long distances as a child and
continuously calculating average speeds and percentages of distances covered as we traveled. In college I took
upper division math classes such as Real Analysis and Game Theory (and placed near the top of the curve)
though they were not required for my major. All this time spent playing with math has left me with a deep
understanding of the way numbers work and the many ways in which problems can be solved.
When I first began tutoring I was stunned to find that most of the kids I worked with, although very bright, not
only lacked the ability to solve complex problems, they were very uncomfortable with some of the basic
principles of math. This discomfort led to fear and avoidance, and the avoidance led to more discomfort. A
vicious cycle began. Instead of seeing math as a beautiful system in which arithmetic, algebra and geometry all
worked together to allow one to solve problems, they saw it as a bunch of jumbled rules which made little
sense that they were forced to memorize.
As a tutor, I found that it was important when starting with a new student to find out where his/her discomfort
with math began. Often, this meant going back several years in their education to explain important basic
concepts. For some students, fractions and decimals were the point at which math stopped making sense. For
many others, it was the introduction of letters to represent numbers in algebra. Some students found that
identifying their weaknesses was an embarrassing process. I explained to them that it was not their fault.
Everyone comes to understand new concepts in math in a slightly different way, and the problem was that no
teacher had taken the time to explain their "problem area" in a way which would make sense to them. Since
math was a system, once they missed out on that one building block, it was not surprising that the rest of it did
not make sense. Our mission together would be to find the way in which the system worked for them.
Once we had identified the initial "problem area, " I would spend a lot of time getting the student to play with
questions in that area from a lot of different perspectives. For example, if fractions were the problem, then I
would create games to get the student to think of fractions in terms of division, ratios, decimals or other
equivalent systems. This would often be a fairly unstructured process, as I wanted to see how the student's
mind worked and keep them from feeling any anxiety. Usually it did not take long for the concepts to start
becoming clear to the student, as he/she played with the numbers in the absence of the pressure of school. My
goal was to not just white wash over a student’s weaknesses with a few rules which would be quickly
forgotten, but to help them develop an understanding and an appreciation for the underlying principles.
I found this process to be very satisfying for both myself and the young men and women that I taught. It was a
wonderful feeling to have a student laugh out loud with relief as a principle which had been unclear and
causing anxiety for years suddenly made sense. Once these old "problem areas" were cleared up it was usually
quite simple to make clear the subjects that they were working on at the time, especially since I already had an
understanding of how they were best able to understand new concepts. Again, I found it important to get the
student to play with the new material and look at it in several ways so as to develop a true understanding of
the material.
I was quite successful as a tutor. One young man increased his Math S.A.T. by 150 points. Another student
improved so dramatically in geometry, her test scores jumped from about 55 percent to over 90 percent, that
her teacher kept her after class and asked if she was cheating. Although most of my students did not improve
this dramatically, I walked away from every lesson that I gave feeling that I had helped someone understand
and enjoy math. I hope to be able to continue teaching, if only for a few hours a week, for the rest of my life.
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Sample Admission Essay 6
Many people enjoy building things with Legos when they are growing up, but usually not to the
exclusion of all other activities. For me though, nothing was more fun that getting a picture in my
mind's eye and then being able to manifest it in reality using those ingenious little blocks, or any
other substance that lent itself to my uses.
The same applies in management where strong analytical skills are valued as much as, if not more
than, effective managerial and leadership skills. Unfortunately, for some consultants, these
characteristics, at times, are mutually exclusive. I was fortunate, however, to work with [name]
during my first internship at [name of the company].
As my trainee advisor, he demonstrated a superior combination of leadership, managerial, and
communication skills. As a result of our interaction, I learned several important lessons and tools that
I used on subsequent projects to improve my effectiveness as a team leader.
To begin, [name] is a true leader who exhibits courage and dedication. A powerful trait rarely found
in the realm of business, courage is unique in its ability to unify and motivate people. Moreover, his
courage is balanced appropriately with professionalism, strong values, and humility. He is sensitive to
others’ feelings and recognizes that different people require different types of direction and
treatment. Although he often works with diverse and difficult groups, he always seems able to reach
consensus and create a shared vision and purpose. Furthermore, he excels at establishing priorities
and proactively setting direction.
As an effective manager, [name] also is able to translate his broad direction into discrete, tangible
tasks. Since consultants often use difficult or creative analytical approaches, clearly articulating tasks
and defining outputs is very important. In addition, he exercises the appropriate level of supervision.
Rather than micro-managing his team members, [name] establishes clear accountabilities and
expectations and pushes work down to the correct level. As a result, he creates a strong sense of
ownership and leverages the skills of his team members. Furthermore, he excels at creating a
supportive environment and, when necessary, coaching team members to help them develop new
skills.
Finally, [name] is a masterful communicator. He is the only project manager I have had who gave me
consistent and constructive feedback, importantly, both positive and negative. Such feedback not
only provides clear developmental objectives, but also signals to others that he values their
contributions. This type of balanced and open communication quickly forms the foundation of
mutual trust and respect. Furthermore, [name] excels in the art of negotiation and debate. He states
his points with remarkable precision and is expert at remaining objective and recognizing all sides of
an argument. And, regardless of the volatility of a situation or the strength of his feelings, he always
listens to all positions patiently and effectively controls his demonstration of emotion, thereby
gaining the respect of others and lending additional credibility to his positions.
Given my limited experience managing teams, my exposure to [name] was central to my early
success at [consulting firm]. For example, although I had considered myself a leader in athletics, I had
not learned to translate those skills into the business arena. [Name] taught me several effective
methods to lead teams. Admittedly, as a highly motivated young analyst with very high work
standards, I also lacked many of the skills required for effective team leadership. However, I quickly
learned the importance of flexibility and became more comfortable providing feedback and directing
the work of others. Furthermore, through his example, [name] taught me the importance of
objectivity and the utility of several effective communication techniques. For example, I learned to
use my sense of humor as an effective tool to persuade, disarm, or motivate others.
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Early in my career at [consulting firm], I had several rare opportunities to lead client teams. In part
due to the lessons I learned from [name], these projects were a great success. As a result, I went on
to manage a half dozen diverse and difficult client teams that ranged in membership. With each
project, I further refined the lessons I learned from [name] and developed new techniques for
leading and managing teams. Due to my rapid development, I was promoted to [position], a
managerial, post-M.B.A. position at [consulting firm], signifying that I can progress to the partner
level. Although I realize my tool kit is far from complete, these skills will be invaluable both in
business school and beyond.